Diary of Tom Weylin
Dear Diary,
Today, I saw something I will never forget and that I will probably never understand. I will start by writing the facts, as my wife told me to begin with, then I will continue with what I saw with my own eyes. Screams coming from the river caught the attention of my wife. She ran towards it and saw Rufus drowning. She started screaming too, so I took my musket and ran towards the river. By the time I got there, a black woman appeared out of nowhere, dived in the river and brought Rufus back to the shore. I think my wife didn’t saw everything or misunderstood, but she started attacking the woman. She pushed my wife away and began to reanimate my son, blowing air into his mouth and pumping his chest to make him breathe. Oddly, it worked.
Then I arrived. I didn’t quite understood what happened, I just saw a black woman over my son. It made me furious, and I pushed the woman off my son, and pointed my musket right in the middle of her forehead. The panic and fear in her eyes made me hesitate for a fraction of a second, then I pulled the trigger. Now that’s the crazy part. As the bullet was leaving the cannon, the woman vanished like a ghost, and the bullet ended up in the sand.
I didn’t believe in ghosts or anything similar before this incident, but now I’m questioning myself. I simply have no explanation. At least my son is safe. I questioned my wife and she told me not knowing where the woman came from, so I believe she appeared out of nowhere too. I’ve done some research, but nothing seems to explain this mysterious event. I asked my subordinates if a slave had escaped their workplace, but the watchers said no. I will stay alert from now on.
You were quite in character, Félix! I felt like I was rereading the novel from Tom's perspective! You're quite the talented writer! ;)
ReplyDeletePlease review the following:
- spelling (ad): ad begin
- I do not know if it is because of the writing style to fit with your character, but some verb tenses (especially the present perfect and irregular verbs) are not correctly used. Simply let me know if it is a matter of style, and I will disregard them.
- Break your text in paragraphs
As Rufus :
ReplyDeleteAbout that, if you see her again, can you please not kill her. I mean she saved my life that day and you almost killed her for doing so. I understand you didn't understand what was going on but now that you know, you could think about preparing an apology for the next time you see her. Also thanks for trying to protect me. In the end that's what you were trying to do.